Final Script for "Bloodline"

Final Draft

INT. JARED'S ROOM. DAY

JARED is meditating and preparing his weapon

JARED

Out, out, brief candle! Life's but a walking shadow, a poor player, that struts and frets his hour upon the stage

INT. MICHAEL'S ROOM. DAY

MICHAEL is casually reading the newspaper

INT. JARED'S ROOM. DAY

JARED is sharpening his knife. He is leaving his house and heads towards MICHAEL'S house.

EXT. VICTIM'S APARTMENT BUILDING. DAY

JARED presses a button and is then let in 

INTERCOM

Hello. Who's there?

JARED

It's time.

INT. MICHAEL'S APARTMENT BUILDING STAIRCASE. DAY

JARED is slowly going up the stairs

INT. MICHAEL'S ROOM. DAY

MICHAEL is preparing to go out to work

INT. MICHAEL'S APARTMENT BUILDING TOP OF STAIRCASE. DAY

JARED sneakily and cautiously enters MICHAEL'S house and eventually, his room.

INT. MICHAEL'S ROOM. DAY

JARED sneaks up on MICHAEL whilst he is reading and takes out a knife. He then covers MICHAEL'S mouth with his hand

JARED

You can't escape death!!

Changes in the script

After analysing the first draft that my group decided to make some changes (shown above)

From the first draft the characters now have names instead of being antagonists and protagonists. This is due to actually discussing and thinking about what the names are going to be, and actually going into detail later on for the script. We also decided to include several other shots of Michael which constantly cross cuts between him and Jared. This was done in an attempt to build even more tension and suspense. Additionally, from the first version of the script to the final version we have added more enigmas to the opening sequence such as why is he going to kill this particular person and why is he meditating at the start. All this aims to create tension and suspense which is why the changes were added. Finally, by adding more scenes of Jared entering the house which would be prolonged instead of just appearing at the house it also helps make the audience be "on the edge of their seats". By adding in the speech of Jared at the beginning of the script it makes the character seem more mysterious and quite psychotic when compared to the first draft.

In terms of the audience age rating the chosen age rating is 15. The opening sequence fully fits into that area. The use of the obvious weapon at the start of the script goes into the age rating, it shows the prolonged threat that is imminent throughout all of the opening sequence. With the 15 age rating we as a group were able to include the prolonged threat which doesn't have to be resolved quickly compared to that of a 12 or PG age rating which has to be limited or solved quickly. That is why the script above fits with the audience as a lot of the content that is found wouldn't be allowed in younger age ratings. But also for the mid teenager audience it fits into some of the things which might interest them based from the research that was done.

The practicality of the opening sequence from the script shows that everything was fit for purpose. The dialogue that is presented by Jared isn't too long which creates a sense of mystery and suspense. We as a group have decided that camera work will be the main focus of suspense and tension which is why in the script there is not a lot of talking.